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 ## What makes this project different
 
-The people who create our platform often make very different design and technology decisions from other projects, and this stems from our deep belief that, to see change in the world, we must build and maintain systems that **reflect our values and principles.**
+The people who create our platform make very different design and technology decisions from other projects, and this stems from our deep belief that, to see a change in the world, we must build and maintain systems that **reflect our values and principles.**
 
-From design to system architecture to basic vocabulary and communication patterns, our systems have grown organically since 2010 to support a powerful, diverse, and cooperative network of people capable of taking on environmental problems that affect communities around the world. The platform we have built together speaks to this shared history in many ways, big and small. It reflects input from people facing serious health issues and on-the-ground organizers, policy specialists and hardware hackers, educators and civil servants.
+From design to system architecture to basic vocabulary and communication patterns, our systems have grown organically since 2010 to support a powerful, diverse, and cooperative network of people capable of taking on environmental problems that affect communities around the world. The platform we have built together speaks to this shared history in many ways, big and small. It reflects input from people facing serious health issues, on-the-ground organizers, policy specialists, hardware hackers, educators, and civil servants.
 
-This broad community, and the Public Lab team’s role in facilitating a space where they can discuss, break down, construct, prototype, and critique real-world projects together, have shaped a platform that incorporates familiar pieces, but ultimately looks and feels quite different from anywhere else on the internet. It continues to grow and be refined, but it also reflects a commitment to listening to one another, to mutual respect and support, to an awareness of the barriers and challenges presented by gaps in expertise and knowledge, and a sensitivity to the inequalities and power imbalances perpetuated by many mainstream modes of knowledge production and technological and scientific development.
+This broad community, and the Public Lab team have facilitated a space where we can discuss, break down, construct, prototype, and critique real-world projects. Together we have shaped a platform that incorporates familiar pieces, but ultimately looks and feels quite different from anywhere else on the internet. Our platform continues to grow and be refined, but it also reflects a commitment to listening to one another, to mutual respect and support, to an awareness of the barriers and challenges presented by gaps in expertise and knowledge, and a sensitivity to the inequalities and power imbalances perpetuated by many mainstream modes of knowledge production and technological and scientific development.
 
-Our mutual aims of democratizing inexpensive and accessible do-it-yourself techniques and creating a collaborative network of practitioners who actively reimagine the human relationship with the environment is supported and facilitated by a system which questions and even challenges how collaborative work can happen.
+Our mutual aims of democratizing inexpensive and accessible do-it-yourself techniques has allowed us to create a collaborative network of practitioners who actively re-imagine the human relationship with the environment. Our goals are supported and facilitated by a system which questions and even challenges how collaborative work can happen.
 
 ## Data Model